OFFICIALISATION: The Storyline
- Freeyorp101
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- Joined: Thu Nov 24, 2005 2:12 am
- Location: New Zealand
Um... I noticed a hole in your plot. It seems you have Princess Lindsey contacting Keen at one point for help. I would wonder why she would choose to contact him, it needs to be established what sort of part Keen has in the overall universe. I would also ask what could be done to make the story a little less... story and a little more... game?
First off, a short one or two level mod could be made to explain the story of that was typed up in length here (as in the backstory of the Oracle and Gnosticene IV). Although it would of course be from one person's point of view, and would not in fact be entirely accurate. This could be packaged as a prequel and a demo of sorts to the rest of the mod while people wait for you guys to actually get something done. This would have you playing as someone separate to Keen, and therefore could occur at any time in the past. This makes me think about the necessity of having Keen be a slightly prominent figure in space, but seeing as all he has done is save the Earth and the Vorticon's planet, it doesn't seem to me much like he would appear significant.
This makes me think, the oracle shows things, but only when the council decides to have it show things. Perhaps they foresaw this coming in some way, but not soon enough to prevent it happening, however Princess Lindsey escaped in order to warn Keen as to what was going on. Now, my post is getting to be quite long, and as such I will end it.
Edit: I just came up with an idea! Perhaps Keen decides to make the Photachyon Transceiver as a safety precaution because of some of the events that happened in either this, or the Vorticons trilogy! That would be an interesting tie in to fit it neatly into the story! I think that as many of these sorts of tie ins should be found to make it sound as legitimate and official as possible.
First off, a short one or two level mod could be made to explain the story of that was typed up in length here (as in the backstory of the Oracle and Gnosticene IV). Although it would of course be from one person's point of view, and would not in fact be entirely accurate. This could be packaged as a prequel and a demo of sorts to the rest of the mod while people wait for you guys to actually get something done. This would have you playing as someone separate to Keen, and therefore could occur at any time in the past. This makes me think about the necessity of having Keen be a slightly prominent figure in space, but seeing as all he has done is save the Earth and the Vorticon's planet, it doesn't seem to me much like he would appear significant.
This makes me think, the oracle shows things, but only when the council decides to have it show things. Perhaps they foresaw this coming in some way, but not soon enough to prevent it happening, however Princess Lindsey escaped in order to warn Keen as to what was going on. Now, my post is getting to be quite long, and as such I will end it.
Edit: I just came up with an idea! Perhaps Keen decides to make the Photachyon Transceiver as a safety precaution because of some of the events that happened in either this, or the Vorticons trilogy! That would be an interesting tie in to fit it neatly into the story! I think that as many of these sorts of tie ins should be found to make it sound as legitimate and official as possible.